A shadow, gloomy, dark, secluded,
And opaquing the light, Was I..
High, I was not, yet i was up so high..
The shadow kept looming, unto the roof,
inspite of the moonlessness..
Just The stars, smugly and sly..
Gloomy, dark, secluded, I was not,
Yet the gloomy, secluded shadow, stood still..
The frills on the curtains, lay swinging,
The window panes, pale, occult,
turned sheepishly creaky with the whirl.
Swifly swaying the trees at a distant, whispered..
Songs of shrilly silent serenity..
Distant seemed the dawn, to reveille..
Not so distant seemed the sky.
Brisky breeze blew soft, past us.
And the shadow and I, softspoken as ever,
stood silent, unhinged, gazing,
at the moonlessness of the starlit sky.
The eerie stillness of time, was scary..
The slowly reverberating darkness afar, was neigh..
By the shadow, gloomy, dark and secluded..
..Opaquing the light, Was I...
And opaquing the light, Was I..
High, I was not, yet i was up so high..
The shadow kept looming, unto the roof,
inspite of the moonlessness..
Just The stars, smugly and sly..
Gloomy, dark, secluded, I was not,
Yet the gloomy, secluded shadow, stood still..
The frills on the curtains, lay swinging,
The window panes, pale, occult,
turned sheepishly creaky with the whirl.
Swifly swaying the trees at a distant, whispered..
Songs of shrilly silent serenity..
Distant seemed the dawn, to reveille..
Not so distant seemed the sky.
Brisky breeze blew soft, past us.
And the shadow and I, softspoken as ever,
stood silent, unhinged, gazing,
at the moonlessness of the starlit sky.
The eerie stillness of time, was scary..
The slowly reverberating darkness afar, was neigh..
By the shadow, gloomy, dark and secluded..
..Opaquing the light, Was I...
Loved the flow!
ReplyDeleteThanks for your comment :)
I am your new follower:-D
Keep expressing !
I enjoyed reading this one ... a nice verse... with lots of imagery...
ReplyDeleteॐ नमः शिवाय
Om Namah Shivaya
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Hey Simran,
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Had a look at your blog too, lovely collection of poems and write-ups. I am your new follower as well! ;)
Keep sharing!
Sid
Hi Shashi..
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WOW!!
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O_O
Heya Blue...
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Lovely words :)!
ReplyDeleteThere's a flow and then subtle breaks.I love. :)
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Oh, dear - alliterations come that spontaneously on your tip of pen
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Hi Akanksha..
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Hi Dibakar,
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U have a nice blog too!
Keep visiting, and sharing! :)
Applause! :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful imagery.
"Gloomy, dark, secluded, I was not,
Yet the gloomy, secluded shadow, stood still.."
Like! :)
Niti..Thankies! :D
ReplyDeletethe imagery in this was lovely and the words setting the pace was fun!!
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@SilentObserver
Thanks, glad u were able to relate. Means a lot! Love ur blog as well! :)
"Distant seemed the dawn, to reveille.."
ReplyDeleteAmazing, read a good poem after a long time, you should write more like this..
great style! adding you to my reading list : )
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@SprigBlossoms
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Uve got a lovely space as well! :)
'Opaquing the light, Was I...'
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely loved it.
:)
@Paulami, Thanks a lot! :)
ReplyDeleteHi Amropali...
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